1. Against All Odds Pt. 04


    Date: 2/8/2024, Categories: Loving Wives, Author: byMarcDwayne 

    Against All Odds

A story of lost love, coming of age, cheating, addiction, and trying to turn back time.

First, I apologize for writing a book on my first effort. Second, I should have really finished before I started releasing the chapters. I had no clue the story would get any attention. I knew going in, Loving Wives was a potential mind field, but I was unprepared for the volume of comments.

Taking in all feedback in the aggregate was a massive learning experience. Thank you everyone!

1)The story was way too long

2)To brave in the point of view changes

3) Too much overlap and repetition in the story

4) God forbid too much sex

5) Deplorable characters (I really tried to make each flawed and two-dimensional, with redemption always possible, but I was shocked at the judgments people made. This is noted for the future)

6) I'm a totally shit writer

7) Enough positive feedback to ignore those that claimed #6

8) And all the rest

Yes, I used the dreaded "Hater" term. However, their feedback was as important in the total as the positive. My beef is the vehemence and vitriol. I just don't understand meanness. I know we live firmly in the 'grievance culture,' but oh man, does it come alive in the Loving Wives category!

I did delete some nasty feedback but left most intact. Why not.

With all the feedback in mind, I became paralyzed to finish the story. I considered starting from scratch with a total rewrite. Or changing my notes for the ...
    ... finish. To turn left and try to make the haters happy.

What did I decide?

To die by the sword with which I started the story in the first place. It was my first work, so I kept writing how it came out. It's still too long and needs an editor, and I still need a lot of work with this craft.

I desperately looked for an editor before I published. I struck out in this. I did get one piece of advice that said to publish something, and you might find editors. I did, in fact, get some offers, and I will call upon them for my subsequent work.

Thank you, everyone, for the ride ...

Now - an important news flash. This story was ultimately about addiction. This last entry deals with this. There is very little sex, and for those that want burning bitches will be disappointed. Addiction is a hard reality in our society and can wreak considerable wreckage on families. There is a path ...

Thank you for your indulgence in reading this crazy big thing I created.

Marc Dwayne

Part Four

Dave Lost and Going Down Fast

After Mel left, I remained at the table. The tears had slowed, and I was trying to hydrate with beer. Now almost drunk, I eyed the cocaine on the coffee table, but the futon was like a menacing demon, wet with lust; it was mocking me. I couldn't get the images out of my head. I caved and grabbed the cocaine mirror. They had left enough for me to get hella high really quick. The futon was still making sex sounds at me,"Oh Ryan, you're so huge, fuck me, fuck me ...
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